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Revise ideas before polishing errors
1 · Learn
Revision can change organisation, clarity and emphasis. Proofreading checks details such as spelling, punctuation and agreement. Both matter, but correcting commas will not repair an argument whose main evidence is missing.
Read once for meaning, once for structure and then carefully for accuracy. Compare the final version with the purpose and audience, and rehearse a presentation so pace and volume help listeners follow.
2 · Worked example
In 'It was good because it was good', I first replace the repeated judgement with a specific reason. Only then do I polish the sentence's punctuation and spelling.
3 · Your turn
Improve 'The display was good because it was good' using a concrete invented feature, clearly framed as your example.
Check your answer
Example: 'The display explained each model with a clear labelled diagram, which helped me understand how it worked.' Other specific coherent reasons are valid.
4 · Apply your learning
Exchange a draft for feedback, choose one substantial revision and explain how it helps the intended reader.
Adult guidance and safety
Read the supplied text together if needed. Accept well-supported alternative interpretations, not invented evidence. Use wider whole books, poems and plays alongside these short original models; provide specific feedback on writing and revisit spelling over time.
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